Story redone.
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Story redone.
some days ago i read the story on the Dark Alliance site, and sadly, i found it was quite rubbish very poor english (no offence to the person made), so i decided (in my everlasting boredom) to rewrite it, in (i hope) correct english, since this is defenitely gonna be one of the best mods ever. I didn't write anything around it, but if you want me too, i could make a better story out of it
anyway, here it is:
Prologue!
It all starts with a little boy's dreams. "One day I'm going to be the greatest hero
of all time", he used to tell everyone who took the time to listen, " I’m going to slay all
the dragons and demons in the world. Jerucan Thae can still hear the boy’s voice in his mind.
This voice was actually a whisper from the past, when he too was young, with so many
great dreams. This little boy followed his dreams, and he actually grew up to be
a very well known hero. He traveled all over the world to help people, and to slay
anything evil that comes in his path, and his name was Jerucan Thae However, he still
has alot to accomplish. Some of his best friends still aided him in his quests, but this was
something that was going to change when they entered the peaceful town of Tristram. Their
main intention of coming to Tristram, was to make this their home, for many years to come, since
they aren't as young as they used to be, and many years of tiredness, darkness, and great
deeds lay behind them. And only a peaceful rest, comforted by their many treasures gained
on their quests, awaited them. Their days of danger lay in the past, though Jerucan's
heart told him, there was still a massive quest awaiting them, before they deserve their long
awaited rest.
The first few months the hero's lived in Tristram, were peaceful, and they all agreed
that this was the place that they were going to stay for a long time. Then all of a sudden
strange things started too happen in and around of Tristram. Random villagers disappearing,
strange wanderers arriving and departing, and the presence of evil seemed to grow in the
wilderness around them. No one had an idea of what was going on. Rumors spread around Tristram
that the source of this evil was something hidden deep below Tristram's Cathedral. Many
heroes arrived, in search of fame and fortune, and many bravely entered the Cathedral,
in shining Armour and dangerously looking weapons. None of them were ever seen among mortal
men again.
Life in Tristram was getting worse by the day, and Jerucan felt there was something big
happening in Tristram. A darkness seemed to be creeping around his heart every passing day,
and he got nightmares almost on almost daily basis. Voices from the Catherdral seemed to
be calling him. His friends noticed there was something wrong with Jerucan. Jerucan
told his friends about his dreams, the voiced, the darkness, at which they decided to
pick up there weapons, and enter what would be their last, most dangerous, and most
important quest ever. After 5 months of freedom, Jerucan and his friends entered
the Cathedral, were their greatest fear was waiting for them. They fought countless
hours, in blinding darkness, encountering a seeming endless amount of creatures never
seen before on the face of the earth, and a dark presence seemed to be luring them
down into the very depths of the Cathedral. All of a sudden, the presence seemed
to be all around them, in an invisible unescapable ring of darkness, and suddenly,
Diablo, the lord of Terror, in Physical form, towered above them.
A great fear overcame the brave heroes. Many foes had they killed, many monsters, a
great number of times larger then them, and they only thought of glory, and gold.
But this was different. How could you kill a prime evil, if this was even possible?
Diablo felt their fears, and boomed: "Pitiless fools! You cannot harm me! Not even
Death can save you from me! And with this, he struck down Jerucan's best friend, almost
killing him instantly. It seemed to Jerucan, that timed stood still, as he looked
down on the body of his best friend. Diablo raised his voice once more, and said:
I can help you, and your wounded friend. I will save his, and your lives, if you
listen, and do what i tell you. So Jerucan made a Dark Alliance with his greatest
enemy of all times. Jerucan would do anything to have his best friend back, for
he too had saved his life many times before.
A trace of darkness!
With this, the Dark Alliance was born, and we fiend our hero back in a Rogue's
Camp. He heard many rumors of what happened in Tristram, but since no sane
mortal would come near, no truth was to be believed. No path leads there
anymore.
The story of a mystic stranger!
One day, a mysterious stranger entered the Rogue Encampment. He was asking
for the way to Lut Gholein. Rogues were always concerned about any
man traveling through the wilderness, so a group of Rogues, led by none other
then the Rogue hero Blood Raven, offered to bring the stranger on the way
to Lut Gholein. Many days go by, and no sign of Blood Raven and her group has
been reported to the camp. Rumour goes that Blood Raven has gone mad.
The mad Blood Raven!
The rumors seemed true. Blood Raven's once so true heart, has been taken over by evil,
and she settled in a nearby cemetery: The Burial Grounds. Blood Raven talked many of her
Rogue kin to join her, on the side of Darkness. Telling great tales of immortality
granted by none other then Diablo himself. She has one powerful ally, living in the
Black Marsh, an old spirit of evil, long believed to be none other then a scary story
to scare little children if they go out after dark, known as 'The Countess', the widow
who bathed in the blood of hundreds of young virgins, living in her Dark tower, she has
awaited the appropriate time to reveal herself. This time has come.
The dark cloud!
Since the stranger left the camp, many strange rumors go round about him. Everywhere he goes,
evil and darkness seems to sprout in his footsteps. Always heading to the east, never showing
his face to any mortal man.
Strange things are happening around the Rogue camp. The Cold Plains have turned into an icy
landscape, snow falling continuously, it hadn't snowed in the Cold Plains for years.
The cave in the Tamoe Highlands has turned into a brewnest of evil. There are rumors that an
evil sorceress lives there, summoning fearful demons.
Valley of Paradise!
Rumour goes that there is a valley somewhere hidden in the mountains near the Tamoe Highlands.
Very few people have ever visited this peaceful place. Only farmers live there, in no need of
strangers.
This all changed when a strange sorcerer came to this place. He became unwelcome there, for no
know reason.
The farmers drove him from the valley. The sorcerer got enraged, and people say that he opened
a gate to hell, in the center of the valley, and countless demons took over the valley. And no
visitor ever returned.
The final battle!
All clues around the evil spreading around, go to the catacombs, where a great evil seems to be
lurking. Rumour goes that this evil is none other then Andariel, one of the Lesser Evils. Destroying
her could lead to the cleansing of the Rogue Wilderness, and safe passage to Lut Gholein.
Brother you are free!
Warriv traveled along with the hero the Lut Gholein, where his deeds have become well known.
No rest is granted him here, since Lut Gholein has had strange things happening too. The sewers
beneath the great city seem to be stirring with trouble.
Who can this Mysterious Stranger be, who seems to awake all evil ever put to rest?
Freeing the brother!
Diablo has succeeded in freeing his Big Brother Baal: Lord of Destruction, from the arms of Tyreal,
before our hero was able to find the right tomb. The hero promises himself that he will find
and destroy Diablo, before he is able to free his Eldest brother Mephisto, lord of Hatred.
The final battle!
The hero must face Duriel, the second Lesser Evil, to be able to pass to Kurast.
Things are not always what it seems to be!
After the battle with Duriel, our hero enters Kurast, and is welcomed by the blacksmith Hratli.
He seems to be the most important person in Kurast.
A secret alliance!
You hear rumors that some secret Alliance of men was formed a long time ago, which have joined sides
with evil, and are planning many evil deeds against Kurast. It is said they have their camp to the
east of Kurast, where their plans are starting to take form.
The final battle!
In the very depth of the Travincal, the hero encounters his first, and eldest, Prime Evil: Mephisto,
Lord of Hatred.
Entering Hell!
Our hero enters the last outpost, before his battle with Diablo. Here you meet Tyreal again, who tells
you that you must destroy Mephisto's soulstone, at all costs.
A sad discovery!
The book of the Dark Alliance, made a long time ago, when our hero tried to save his friend, was found in
Hell. Sad memories torture our hero, grief overtakes him
The final battle!
The hunt for Diablo is at an end. The Mysterious Stranger happened to be none other the Diablo himself,
and your most important battle is yet to start, to avenge your friend. The battle will be taken place in
the Inner Sanctum.
The sad end!
Our hero enters Harrogath. The people of Harrogath are surprised to see you here, since they have needed no
help in protecting Mount Arreats, for many centuries. With your coming, they understand that dark times are
awaiting them.
Search for the alliance!
After the discoveries found in the Book of the Dark Alliance, the search for the Alliance starts, but is
nowhere to be found.
The final battle!
It's time to face the last Prime Evil: Baal, Lord of Destruction. Killing him will mean the end of the first
campaign.
There might be some spelling faults in it, but probably not as much as in the previous version. It would be cool if you guys used this story cuz it took quite awhile writing it
And again: i didn't write anything around it, i just used to story as it was
anyway, here it is:
Prologue!
It all starts with a little boy's dreams. "One day I'm going to be the greatest hero
of all time", he used to tell everyone who took the time to listen, " I’m going to slay all
the dragons and demons in the world. Jerucan Thae can still hear the boy’s voice in his mind.
This voice was actually a whisper from the past, when he too was young, with so many
great dreams. This little boy followed his dreams, and he actually grew up to be
a very well known hero. He traveled all over the world to help people, and to slay
anything evil that comes in his path, and his name was Jerucan Thae However, he still
has alot to accomplish. Some of his best friends still aided him in his quests, but this was
something that was going to change when they entered the peaceful town of Tristram. Their
main intention of coming to Tristram, was to make this their home, for many years to come, since
they aren't as young as they used to be, and many years of tiredness, darkness, and great
deeds lay behind them. And only a peaceful rest, comforted by their many treasures gained
on their quests, awaited them. Their days of danger lay in the past, though Jerucan's
heart told him, there was still a massive quest awaiting them, before they deserve their long
awaited rest.
The first few months the hero's lived in Tristram, were peaceful, and they all agreed
that this was the place that they were going to stay for a long time. Then all of a sudden
strange things started too happen in and around of Tristram. Random villagers disappearing,
strange wanderers arriving and departing, and the presence of evil seemed to grow in the
wilderness around them. No one had an idea of what was going on. Rumors spread around Tristram
that the source of this evil was something hidden deep below Tristram's Cathedral. Many
heroes arrived, in search of fame and fortune, and many bravely entered the Cathedral,
in shining Armour and dangerously looking weapons. None of them were ever seen among mortal
men again.
Life in Tristram was getting worse by the day, and Jerucan felt there was something big
happening in Tristram. A darkness seemed to be creeping around his heart every passing day,
and he got nightmares almost on almost daily basis. Voices from the Catherdral seemed to
be calling him. His friends noticed there was something wrong with Jerucan. Jerucan
told his friends about his dreams, the voiced, the darkness, at which they decided to
pick up there weapons, and enter what would be their last, most dangerous, and most
important quest ever. After 5 months of freedom, Jerucan and his friends entered
the Cathedral, were their greatest fear was waiting for them. They fought countless
hours, in blinding darkness, encountering a seeming endless amount of creatures never
seen before on the face of the earth, and a dark presence seemed to be luring them
down into the very depths of the Cathedral. All of a sudden, the presence seemed
to be all around them, in an invisible unescapable ring of darkness, and suddenly,
Diablo, the lord of Terror, in Physical form, towered above them.
A great fear overcame the brave heroes. Many foes had they killed, many monsters, a
great number of times larger then them, and they only thought of glory, and gold.
But this was different. How could you kill a prime evil, if this was even possible?
Diablo felt their fears, and boomed: "Pitiless fools! You cannot harm me! Not even
Death can save you from me! And with this, he struck down Jerucan's best friend, almost
killing him instantly. It seemed to Jerucan, that timed stood still, as he looked
down on the body of his best friend. Diablo raised his voice once more, and said:
I can help you, and your wounded friend. I will save his, and your lives, if you
listen, and do what i tell you. So Jerucan made a Dark Alliance with his greatest
enemy of all times. Jerucan would do anything to have his best friend back, for
he too had saved his life many times before.
A trace of darkness!
With this, the Dark Alliance was born, and we fiend our hero back in a Rogue's
Camp. He heard many rumors of what happened in Tristram, but since no sane
mortal would come near, no truth was to be believed. No path leads there
anymore.
The story of a mystic stranger!
One day, a mysterious stranger entered the Rogue Encampment. He was asking
for the way to Lut Gholein. Rogues were always concerned about any
man traveling through the wilderness, so a group of Rogues, led by none other
then the Rogue hero Blood Raven, offered to bring the stranger on the way
to Lut Gholein. Many days go by, and no sign of Blood Raven and her group has
been reported to the camp. Rumour goes that Blood Raven has gone mad.
The mad Blood Raven!
The rumors seemed true. Blood Raven's once so true heart, has been taken over by evil,
and she settled in a nearby cemetery: The Burial Grounds. Blood Raven talked many of her
Rogue kin to join her, on the side of Darkness. Telling great tales of immortality
granted by none other then Diablo himself. She has one powerful ally, living in the
Black Marsh, an old spirit of evil, long believed to be none other then a scary story
to scare little children if they go out after dark, known as 'The Countess', the widow
who bathed in the blood of hundreds of young virgins, living in her Dark tower, she has
awaited the appropriate time to reveal herself. This time has come.
The dark cloud!
Since the stranger left the camp, many strange rumors go round about him. Everywhere he goes,
evil and darkness seems to sprout in his footsteps. Always heading to the east, never showing
his face to any mortal man.
Strange things are happening around the Rogue camp. The Cold Plains have turned into an icy
landscape, snow falling continuously, it hadn't snowed in the Cold Plains for years.
The cave in the Tamoe Highlands has turned into a brewnest of evil. There are rumors that an
evil sorceress lives there, summoning fearful demons.
Valley of Paradise!
Rumour goes that there is a valley somewhere hidden in the mountains near the Tamoe Highlands.
Very few people have ever visited this peaceful place. Only farmers live there, in no need of
strangers.
This all changed when a strange sorcerer came to this place. He became unwelcome there, for no
know reason.
The farmers drove him from the valley. The sorcerer got enraged, and people say that he opened
a gate to hell, in the center of the valley, and countless demons took over the valley. And no
visitor ever returned.
The final battle!
All clues around the evil spreading around, go to the catacombs, where a great evil seems to be
lurking. Rumour goes that this evil is none other then Andariel, one of the Lesser Evils. Destroying
her could lead to the cleansing of the Rogue Wilderness, and safe passage to Lut Gholein.
Brother you are free!
Warriv traveled along with the hero the Lut Gholein, where his deeds have become well known.
No rest is granted him here, since Lut Gholein has had strange things happening too. The sewers
beneath the great city seem to be stirring with trouble.
Who can this Mysterious Stranger be, who seems to awake all evil ever put to rest?
Freeing the brother!
Diablo has succeeded in freeing his Big Brother Baal: Lord of Destruction, from the arms of Tyreal,
before our hero was able to find the right tomb. The hero promises himself that he will find
and destroy Diablo, before he is able to free his Eldest brother Mephisto, lord of Hatred.
The final battle!
The hero must face Duriel, the second Lesser Evil, to be able to pass to Kurast.
Things are not always what it seems to be!
After the battle with Duriel, our hero enters Kurast, and is welcomed by the blacksmith Hratli.
He seems to be the most important person in Kurast.
A secret alliance!
You hear rumors that some secret Alliance of men was formed a long time ago, which have joined sides
with evil, and are planning many evil deeds against Kurast. It is said they have their camp to the
east of Kurast, where their plans are starting to take form.
The final battle!
In the very depth of the Travincal, the hero encounters his first, and eldest, Prime Evil: Mephisto,
Lord of Hatred.
Entering Hell!
Our hero enters the last outpost, before his battle with Diablo. Here you meet Tyreal again, who tells
you that you must destroy Mephisto's soulstone, at all costs.
A sad discovery!
The book of the Dark Alliance, made a long time ago, when our hero tried to save his friend, was found in
Hell. Sad memories torture our hero, grief overtakes him
The final battle!
The hunt for Diablo is at an end. The Mysterious Stranger happened to be none other the Diablo himself,
and your most important battle is yet to start, to avenge your friend. The battle will be taken place in
the Inner Sanctum.
The sad end!
Our hero enters Harrogath. The people of Harrogath are surprised to see you here, since they have needed no
help in protecting Mount Arreats, for many centuries. With your coming, they understand that dark times are
awaiting them.
Search for the alliance!
After the discoveries found in the Book of the Dark Alliance, the search for the Alliance starts, but is
nowhere to be found.
The final battle!
It's time to face the last Prime Evil: Baal, Lord of Destruction. Killing him will mean the end of the first
campaign.
There might be some spelling faults in it, but probably not as much as in the previous version. It would be cool if you guys used this story cuz it took quite awhile writing it
And again: i didn't write anything around it, i just used to story as it was
Last edited by joris on Sun Jun 06, 2004 7:53 pm, edited 3 times in total.
Re: Story redone.
Its me who is guilty to that!
Thanx for looking throu it, even if the story was written over a year ago and still has many parts that is unfinished. The finished part I know contained a lot of errors since others already had pointed that out in the past (the site sadly contains a lot of uncorrect/spelling errors still, this because off lack off time).
I have read it and it sounds good, couldn't see many errors and you hadn't changed anything to the actual story, besides for adding flavor when needed. So, when its time to do the next website update we will add this one instead off what we have on our site.
Thanx for looking throu it, even if the story was written over a year ago and still has many parts that is unfinished. The finished part I know contained a lot of errors since others already had pointed that out in the past (the site sadly contains a lot of uncorrect/spelling errors still, this because off lack off time).
Thanx for your work,There might be some spelling faults in it, but probably not as much as in the previous version. It would be cool if you guys used this story cuz it took quite awhile writing it
I have read it and it sounds good, couldn't see many errors and you hadn't changed anything to the actual story, besides for adding flavor when needed. So, when its time to do the next website update we will add this one instead off what we have on our site.
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Re: Story redone.
I found a few mistakes in your corrections.
I will list the spelling for now. Many of these mistakes appear more than once.
What it should be (What is currently is)
I'm (i'm)
traveled (travelled)
peaceful (peacefull)
of coming (ofcoming)
disappearing (dissapearing)
arriving (ariving)
No one (Noone)
rumors (Rumours)
which (wich)
depths (dephts)
pitiless (pittiless)
raised (rose)
I (i)
traveling (travelling)
cemetery (cemetary)
Burial (Buriel)
powerful (powerfull)
reveal (reaveal)
Everywhere (Everwhere)
continuously (continously)
fearful (fearfull)
center (centre)
around (aorund)
traveled (travelled)
That is all that I have found so far.
I will list the spelling for now. Many of these mistakes appear more than once.
What it should be (What is currently is)
I'm (i'm)
traveled (travelled)
peaceful (peacefull)
of coming (ofcoming)
disappearing (dissapearing)
arriving (ariving)
No one (Noone)
rumors (Rumours)
which (wich)
depths (dephts)
pitiless (pittiless)
raised (rose)
I (i)
traveling (travelling)
cemetery (cemetary)
Burial (Buriel)
powerful (powerfull)
reveal (reaveal)
Everywhere (Everwhere)
continuously (continously)
fearful (fearfull)
center (centre)
around (aorund)
traveled (travelled)
That is all that I have found so far.
I have nothing to say down here.
Re: Story redone.
fixed tnx for pointing'm out.
I guess i type faster then my brains can keep up with
I guess i type faster then my brains can keep up with
Re: Story redone.
Ummm, so you guys are saying you are almost done with.... 1/15 of the entire mod you're planning to create??
If this is true it sounds kind of crazy
Keep up the great work, and count me in on the private beta
If this is true it sounds kind of crazy
Keep up the great work, and count me in on the private beta
Re: Story redone.
Yep,
We are getting closer for each day
We are getting closer for each day